Your task for this week is to write a quick story based on the photo below.
Describe what happened before this picture was taken, while the picture was being taken and then describe what happened after the picture was taken. Your story needs to be at least 2 paragraphs long.
I look forward to reading your stories! Remember to try and make them as interesting and exciting as possible. We will share the stories on the blog together in class.
Mrs Hetherington
Santa Claus is on top of a chimney because he wants to put presents down the chimney for some children. Then he found some milk and cookies for him to eat and drink Suddenly he fell down the chimney as he tried to grab them. Santas belly got stuck in the chimney. He tried to pull himself out but he couldn’t so he called the reindeers and they were really strong. They all pulled and Santa went flying up into sky because they were so strong. Santa landed into a house and he woke the children up and they came downstairs so Santa hid behind the christmas tree until they went to bed.
A fantastic story Michael. I can just imagine Santa hiding behind a Christmas tree just waiting for the children to go to bed!
Well done
Mrs Hetherington
Once apone a time there was santa ???? in the dark night it was so dusty that he could not see at all and Rudolph he was out of control . Rudolph trips up by mount Everest and he falls into a chimney.
This was interesting Anya. I wonder how he got out of the chimney in the end?
Remember 2 paragraphs…
Well done
Mrs Hetherington
Tjats really nice anya tagg
Father Christmas was trying to deliverer the presents. After he went down the chimney but he got stuck, because he ate to much food before he deliverer the presents to the children’s. Suddenly he got un stuck and went down the chimney and ate the mince pies and a carrot for Rudolf and drink of milk.
After Father Christmas had finished delivering the presents for all the children around the world he went back to the North Pole and have a long sleep for next Christmas.
Great work Elyse. Lovely use of detail. Remember if your writing is in the past tense then the verb should be ‘had’ and not ‘have’
Well done
Mrs Hetherington
One morning all of the children were on their holidays because the school was getting built on that week the school nearly got done.On Tuesday Mrs Tadman wanted to see the new school she thought it was getting ready to be able to be seen.The next morning all of the children were back in school they did a lot of tests maths and they did a new lesson .Then suddenly at break time everyone saw santa they were all happy Santa was upside down in the school chimney that was so funny.Everyone ran inside and they told their teachers.
The teachers were also wondering what time Santa got there. They were thinking and thinking and asked Mrs Tadman. She knew santa was only a big balloon everyone was disappointed they wanted to get some presents.
Great work Faith. I can just imagine everyone was disappointed! Careful with your use of ‘there’ – i’ve edited them to ‘their’.
Well done,
Mrs Hetherington
On Christmas Eve santa was out on his sleigh delivering fantastic presents.Then he got his scroll out of his pocket and opened it.He checked who to go to next.After that he went to a house and glided onto the roof.As he was walking gracefully over to the chimney,He leant over it to go down,but he got stuck…
He shouted for help but nobody came.So he slept there all night until somebody found him.In the morning two little girls were playing in the living room.
When he heard the little girls playing he shouted for help again.The two little girls heard him and then they both looked into the chimney and saw him.Then they shouted their mum to look.So they asked santa if he needed some help and he said yes.So they helped him out.When he was out he gave the two little girls a present each and their mum and dad.
A great story Izzy. I loved the use of the word ‘gracefully’ to describe how he walked.
Well done
Mrs Hetherington
Well done to you Izzy I liked the idea that you have put that no one helped santa .What a good idea for you to add to your great work
well done Faith i like the bit that the balloon didnt let anyone have any presents
Santa was dilivering children’s gifts he didn’t want to wake the children up so he diced to tip toe to the cimeny suddenly he sliped on the icey snow and fell inside it.
When the elf found out that santa was stuck he quickly ran to him and pulled him out.
Then santa got the presents out of the sleigh and used a magic key to get inside so he didn’t slip and get stuck again.He put the presents under the tree ate his milk and cookies and collected the carrot for Rudolf .After he had fed the carrot to Rudolf he got on his sleigh and went back to the north pole he got greeted by Mrs clause and waited until next christmas.
Great work Gabriele. I liked the way the Elf was the hero in your story.
Well done
Mrs Hetherington
Once Santa was flying with Rudolph,Prancer,Dancer,Comet and Dasher happily as ever.They were delivering presets in all shapes and sizes as they do every year ,when two kids named Alex (who has a terrible heart disease ) and Zack (who had anachaphobia ) actually saw Santa . In pure excitement they rushed downstairs to tell their mother “MUM WE SAW SANTA, COME LOOK” their mum said sarcastically “Did you now,lets go upstairs and back to bed” santa landed at their house . By now they were asleep he leaped in as if he was a professonal swimmer but he was to obese(he probably shouldn’t eat all those cookies) . He was stuck ,Rudolph was laughing his head off. All the other reindeers were trying to push him in.After about an hour later he finally got his bottom half into the house!He put the triangle,square and rectangle presents. He got on the sleigh and back to the north pole with mrs claus.
Great work Eamon. Lovely use of brackets for extra information. Remember to use the word ‘too’ instead of ‘to’ if it means excessively.
Well done
Mrs Hetherington
It’s Christmas eve and all children are in bed. Father christmas is riding in his sleigh ready to deliver all the presents. It’s snowing outside. He land his sleigh on the roof of a house it’s very slippy on the roof as santa gets out of his sleigh he slips and falls down the chimney getting stuck on the way.
He wriggles to try get free but to no avail, he finds his mobile phone and rings the elfs for help. Buddy the elf comes to the rescue and pulls Farther Christmas free from the chimney. Once free Father Christmas and Buddy go deliver all the presents. Then went back to the North Pole and santa had to get a bath bexcuse he was full of soot. He found some soot indetween his toes and washed it away.
Great effort Oliver. I loved the idea of Father Christmas having a mobile phone – I wonder if he does?!
Well done
Mrs Hetherington
well done Oliver i like the bit that you describe words well done
Santa was delivering presents to children when he slipped and got stuck in the chimney from having too many mince pies from delivering presents to other children beforehand.
He shouted for his chief elf and reindeers to help him. They pulled and pulled until he was free and then he continues delivering presents to other children .
Great work Jamie-Leigh. I suspected it may have been caused by eating too many mince pies too!
Well done
Mrs Hetherington
It was Christmas Eve Santa was delivering all the presents. He brought Rudolf with his big shiny nose to help him see because it was a very dark night.
He visited a lot of houses that night and ate a lot of mince pies, his tummy got bigger and bigger he ended up getting stuck in somebody’s chimney. But Rudolf got his antlers and pulled him out.
Excellent Ava. I liked your opening as it was very descriptive and set the scene of your story well.
Well done
Mrs Hetherington
that was really good ava
good ideas Ava ,but why does santa have antlers
one day father Christmas was delivering presents and he fell over upside down. He woke all the children up and the parents .They were mad they felt like shouting. So they did and woke up the whole neighborhood Everybody came knocking on the door so did the children.
The next day everybody was saying sorry for what they did.Then they celebrated by having a party it was really fun .After that he got on his sleigh and went away with ruloph.
good lucy rally goood
Thank you ????
Great effort Lucy. I wonder how Father Christmas was rescued from the chimney in the end?
Mrs Hetherington
It was christmas eve and he went to a lot of houses but then santa got stuck and he was stuck for 10 hours.
Rudolf tried to pull him out but he was too heavy to lift so he got more riders to pull santa out and santa got out.
A good try Harvey. This needed to be 2 paragraphs so next time try and speed up your writing.
Mrs Hetherington
Once upon a time Santa was stuck in the chimney because he was too enormous to fit in it and he had too many presents on his back because he had lots of houses to go to deliver the presents to kids. Because they have been on the good list and they have been good and he was rushing to deliver then to the kids and if he didnt deliver them they will be sad .
good axel
A good try Axel. How did he get out in the end?
Mrs Hetherington
Once apon a time there lived a man called Santa Claus he comes every day. Santa got stuck in a chimney no one came to help. 3 weeks later Santa is still in the chimney but someone came to help his name was Caylem he tried to pull Santa out and he did.
Aftar that he was getting ready for Christmas eve but one person was not a sleep it was Rowan and he didn,t give him any.
the end
Poor Santa – being stuck for 3 weeks! Remember to explain in more detail Caylem – he didn’t give Rowan any what?
Mrs Hetherington
Once upon a time santa got stuck in the chimney because he was to big to fit in the chimney and he had a big bag of toys and because he was to big to fit in the chimney he was in a rush to deliver the toys to the little children.
How did he get out in the end Robbie? You made a good start.
Mrs Hetherington
Farther Christmas got stuck in the chimney because he was leaning on the side of the fence he falling in as he was trying to hang the peasants out at the night he was stuck here until the morning.
He went fast to sleep at the night and he had a idea to call one his but they didn’t answer
He had no clue what to do he tried and tried to get out but still couldn’t he wanted some
help
Oh no – is he still stuck there now? See if you can go back and finish this Rhianna.
Mrs Hetherington
Santa was in his slay and one of the reindeer wobbled and he fell out. but one sack of his .presents came down but his slay was gone so he just had to walk instead it took ages .Untill he got stuck in a chimney he couldn’t get out until he heard a sound, he thought it was his slay but it wasn’t but it actually was he asked the readies and it worked Santa was back.
i loved your comments warren it all awsome
A good try Warren. A little confusing in parts – readies/reindeers? I liked the use of the word ‘wobbled’.
Mrs Hetherington
Once upon a time i lived neer my school it was called new pasture lane school all my class and teachers put some milk and cookies out for Santa and we put six carrots out for the reindeer’s so they wouldn’t get tired when they was flying. I woke up in the the night and i looked at my school and santa went through the roof!
nice story cai i loved it
A good build up. I wonder what happened to Santa after his crash?
Mrs Hetherington
Santa was flying across the sky but suddenly he slipped out of his slay and fell into a deep black chimney and he was suck he called for help but no one heard him he was sad he could not get out because he was chubby
Then Rudolf had to help him get out of the chimney it took a while toget him out because he was chubby then he nearly got out but Rudolf went to McDonald for a cheese burger then he was finished so he pulled with all his strengths and finally he was out
A great effort here Harley. Remember when writing online you still need to use full stops here.
Mrs Hetherington
Once a pona time there was a boy called gack it was christmas night he wished he was santa . jack his chimeny was small santa got stuck in the chimey and… he died and jack came santa and he diliverd all the presints just in time they end.
Once apon a time Santa was delivering presents on Christmas day all the children was to exited to sleep but he got stuck in a chimney and he couldn’t get out he called for help. someone came but they couldn’t get him out they had a idea.
They climbed up and pored oil in the chimney and Santa slowly slide down the chimney. And Santa was saved the end.
I liked the idea you used to rescue Santa. Well done
Mrs Hetherington
Santa fell of a roof aw that heart hohoho oh no what time i beter hery up come on lets go pransa go danca rodolf gogogo ho lets go aw i fell said Santa i landad in a chimney
lets go dawn said Santa presats said Santa all the children was sleeping in bed
time is tiking beter get going myty.
A good start William. Try and use speech marks when using speech to make this clearer in your story.
Mrs Hetherington
One Day I (Gerrard) was going outside with my brother (addison) and we was going to play with the snow but suddenly (CrAsH!!!!) ALL THE SNOW WENT TUMBULING DOWN. We got stuck in the snow then we heard a voice “mmmmmm” we thought it was grumbling of my belly but it was santa he said help because he got stuck “help my raindear shaked me off help SO then we got are dad to save santa
The End
Thank goodness for your Dad saving Christmas Gerrard. Great ideas.
Mrs Hetherington
Hi Mrs Hetherington best Christmas ever
Santa was out delivering presents. He had drunk to much wine and eaten too many mince pies so at his next house he went head first into the chimney and he got stuck. He had to shout the reindeer to help him out. when he got there he threw the presents down the chimney.
It sounds like he’d had a tough journey Rowan!
I’m glad you persevered and managed to get all this typed up.
Mrs Hetherington
Santa’s reindeers have left Santa alone,without any Christmas magic! This means its hard to get get down the chimney, Santa doubted going down the chimney and going through the door. But it was way more fun going down the chimney! The sleigh wasn’t working either so he had to sneak around, he found a old ladder laying on the ground.
He grabbed the ladder and placed it upon a house wall to climb up.Santa, being the big belly he is, struggled going up.Eventually he made it to the top,he saw his REINDEERS.
Rudolph pushed Santa down the chimney and couldn’t get out, luckily comet was good and helped him.What naughty reindeers!
I agree – I think he should look at getting some new reindeer! A great story Bobbi.
Mrs Hetherington
One day Santa came down the chimney he got stuck in the chimney and he fell down and he had an idea to call his elf to come and help Santa out of the chimney
What a shame you never got chance to finish this Tenika. A good start.
Mrs Hetherington
Santa was out delivering presents to boys and girls . He landed on my house. Santa tried to go down the chimney to get his cookies and milk. He the chim
What a shame you never got to finish this Harvey, a good start.
Mrs Hetherington
Santa was going home to the North Pole but instead he flew out. He went into the chimney and the ambulance came. After 11hours he was aloud the raindears to go and see him. Rudolph pooped on the floor.
Santa was aloud to go home after 23 days in hospital Santa was aloud to go home. The raindears made a surprise for Santa.Then Santa ran outside then he saw a brand-new sled. The raindears where already ready for Santa. Then they went to the North Pole.
I’m glad you got chance to do this at home Summer – well done.
Mrs Hetherington
That’s a nice story summer
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Anya I like your animation